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Nearly drawing to a close
Each week has been disposed
Where is the time that you chose?

You open eyes and see for which
Every minute and every hour is not a glitch
And now you are no longer blind, you notice your niche
Race not through the day and notice e'ry moment enriched
I think this easily one of the best poems I've ever written.

Happy new year everyone!
Wow. Again, I get to review another poem despite my lack of expertise in this particular area, but I'm willing to tackle this poem, not literally of course, but by reading it a few times, and figuring out what to say about this particular poem.

I can see that the topic in question is about the new year and the general feeling of nostalgia, anxiety and worry. This is the usual feeling one usually gets during first of January, as they wouldn't know what they would be facing against.

But, as you yourself noted, that once you find what you're good at, not only do you look forward to what this year has to offer, but you're willing to take it on, consequences be damned. It's simple but inspirational in my opinion.

Though, I do wish you didn't write the first letter for each line in bold, as I tend to prefer it when you leave it there as a surprise for the reader to discover by themselves.
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I love your poem and i love how you set it up, makes it catchy.

It's good to write about the new year, You did good at telling people about it.

Nice and simple is the way to go sometimes, you don't have to be very proper to get the word out.

The impact of this is just to let others know what is going on. This change each year, and it's good to write about what is going on and the way you see it. I wish you the best of luck, and I hope you never give up.
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FractalBee Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
It's a great one! :clap: :D
Happy New Year!:iconhumlaplz:
TwinAgateDragons Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks! You too!
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